a fairwell poem for a person who ment a great deal too me.

[brianmanahan]

littlle disk claimer before hand, this is a old peace i composed for a lon lost friend.he died so i wrote him this pome. we people can move on and the hurt can fade,butit never gose away
i tihnk u all can prolblaby relate




i canot beleave
just how much
pain there is
since you leaved

the skies are gray
the pain remanes
like my soul were
hit by a train

like a flame
dowsed by rain
the hartache came
but im to blame

i should hav said
somthing to convey
just how bad
i wish you could have stayed

i am so sad
but yuo are gone
and all alonge
i feel so wrong

even so, I know you
would want me
to still be
strong.

 

[Cuda1447]

rofl, funny pome

 

[Soundmanred]

Trying too hard.
Be more subtle.

 

[brianmanahan]

Trying too hard.
Be more subtle.

i have tried tobe subtle about feeligngs of the soul, tried to hide them, does not work. it is true wat they say it is liek therapy to express

 

[JulesMaximus]

Holy fucking spelling fail!

 

[Sinsear]

Let me guess, Ebonics?

 

[brianmanahan]

i am sorry for the spelling errors i didnot re write it when i found it an when i wrote it i wasupset and did not concern my self with spellcheck

 

[Soundmanred]

i have tried tobe subtle about feeligngs of the soul, tried to hide them, does not work. it is true wat they say it is liek therapy to express

This is what I'm talking about. Responding as if you have no idea what trolling is, or the meaning of my post.
It makes me long for the good old days of real trolls who knew their craft.
Here are some tips:
1. Too much misspelling makes it obvious. I mean "disk claimer"? That's stretching the bounds of believability.
2. Playing the oblivious makes it obvious.
3. It's not believable, you have to create a better persona first, then troll.

 

[DangerAardvark]

littlle disk claimer before hand, this is a old peace i composed for a lon lost friend.he died so i wrote him this pome. we people can move on and the hurt can fade,butit never gose away
i tihnk u all can prolblaby relate




i canot beleave
just how much
pain there is
since you leaved

the skies are gray
the pain remanes
like my soul were
hit by a train

like a flame
dowsed by rain
the hartache came
but im to blame

i should hav said
somthing to convey
just how bad
i wish you could have stayed

i am so sad
but yuo are gone
and all alonge
i feel so wrong

even so, I know you
would want me
to still be
strong.

bro

u just touched me
way down in my cockles
now my heart is free
to soar in morocco

stay strong bro

 

[Dominato3r]

bro

u just touched me
way down in my cockles
now my heart is free
to soar in morocco

stay strong bro

And soar to morocco did I
with an injured thigh

then I saw the light
but by then my thigh was alright

 

[MAKENITO]

And soar to morocco did I
with an injured thigh

then I saw the light
but by then my thigh was alright

my thigh was alright,
but I had a limp

and never got to see the hooker
or even visit the pimp

 

[Ichinisan]

Return of failtroll.

...actually, he never left.

...and he seemed quite successful in the last thread (even though obvious troll is obvious).

Does that mean he's a wintroll? Why are you people so easily troll'd?!

You're FEEDING IT!

There was a troll
a real asshole
he made my eyes roll

Tired of the rigmarole
like a mole on a roll
out for a stroll
to buy some coal,
I stole the whole casserole

 

[GuitarDaddy]

I feal yo payne, foreal

 

[GuitarDaddy]

Originally Posted by Dominato3r And soar to morocco did I with an injured thigh then I saw the light but by then my thigh was alright

my thigh was alright, but I had a limp and never got to see the hooker or even visit the pimp

your thigh was tight! but the pimp was limp and left with the hooker who took flight into the night. But thats alright

 

[SandEagle]

You spelt poem correctly, moron

 

[Lifted]

i like your pomes. moar please.

 

[BrokenVisage]

brianmanahan for Elite

 

[grrl]

Bad poetry is obviously bad, bad attempts at bad poetry are even more obviously bad.

 

[ahenkel]

not funny anymore oh and reported.

 

[Sinsear]

not funny anymore oh and reported.

This forum seems to breed a culture of snitches.

 

[ahenkel]

This forum seems to breed a culture of snitches.

Thanks captain buzzkill

 

[gooseman]

Holy fucking spelling fail!

And punctuation, capitalization and grammer.

 

[Hayabusa Rider]

 

[Dominato3r]

your thigh was tight! but the pimp was limp and left with the hooker who took flight into the night. But thats alright

Later did I meet the pimp
We conversed over a bowl of shrimp

He touched my thigh with his hand
Soon an infection ran up to my pancreatic gland

 

[BoomerD]

Obvious troll is still obvious troll.

I don't think it's possible for anyone to be as "English stupid" as the OP seems to be...it's GOTTA be intentional...trying to goad those silly Grammar Nazis...

Oh fuck...waidaminit...