Critique my resume

James Bond

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I'm trying to find a Network Engineering job at the moment, but I get the feeling my resume sucks.

I know you guys are pros at telling people how much their resumes suck, so I thought you could maybe help me out!

Any comments are appreciated.


Updated with new resume: 8/9:
NEW RESUME
 

HN

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Certified Cisco Network Associate
*CCNA Certified

Doesn't that mean exactly the same thing?
Also, sure love them semicolons, eh? :Q
 

poopaskoopa

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Yeah that's an ugly format for sure. And what's "many layer 2/3 protocols?" You need to redo/reword Computer Proficiency section(I dunno.. list OS/apps/HWs separately or something... Anything!) and probably reword/remove Comprehension. No one wants to hire illiterate people, but the fact that you're not illiterate is not impressive enough to list on the resume for the same reason you don't mention that you can walk and chew gum at the same time.
 

bwatson283

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New format!!!!!!
Many companies would see the format and throw it away. Your first impression sucks!
 

James Bond

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I found a new format that I personally like a lot more. I'll play around and you guys can tell me what you think.
 

3NF

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Are you in school? If not, then start it with your job experiences, not education. Secondly, it can be assumed what courses you took, or should have taken, from Computer Information Systems. So just say [Education] - Major - School - all the other is fluff and is really meaningless, unless you did something that really stands out. Focus on the experience section.
 

bwatson283

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Better

But:
Take out your GPA, you may exclude yourself in two minutes. Most people could careless about your GPA, as long as you graduated.
Make your objective longer.

I like this line that i use "To gain experience that that I will use in the rest of my life" Something of that sort

Dont put 100% detail, just enough to grab their attention and call you. Sometimes the more you have the more it hurts.
 

bwatson283

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Originally posted by: 3NF
Are you in school? If not, then start it with your job experiences, not education. Secondly, it can be assumed what courses you took, or should have taken, from Computer Information Systems. So just say [Education] - Major - School - all the other is fluff and is really meaningless, unless you did something that really stands out. Focus on the experience section.

Yup
 

HN

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You're repeating several items in the volunteer experience section (only difference being the year). list one instance of each and put the range (1999-2001, 2004-2005)
 
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YOur name and address is not legible.

The biggest thing. You have actual experience in area that seem to matter. Your volunteer stuff is not needed. Get rid of it and expand your work experience.

Your objective should change with each employer you send this thing out to. Customize it to work best. A generic subject will not leap out at anyone nor does it show initiative.
 

tfinch2

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I've never heard of C+

Also putting you have experience in Ubuntu screams Linux n00b.
 

KillerCharlie

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-You don't need an overall GPA, but I would reword it to say "Major GPA."

-Extensive experience in Ubuntu? If you're experience really is extensive, you instead would say extensive experience in unix/linux. If you can't say that, then you don't have extensive experience with Ubuntu.

-Under the volunteer section, don't list everything for every year - it's really cluttered that way and adds nothing to your resume. Instead, write "Children's Hospital Seattle, 1999-2001," for example. I think it's okay to have a volunteer/activities section. I usually get asked by recruiters things I list there. It helps even more when they ask a situational question in an interview (which they WILL ask) and you give an example from an activity you have listed.

-Your objective is 100% fine. Do not add crap like "find something I want to do for the rest of my life" like someone suggested. Recruiters don't like stupid crap like that in resumes; they want the bottom line.

-I'm not sure about the summary section. I would rename to "skills" and list it later, like after experience. The actual items listed under it seem fine though.
 

fallenangel99

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New template, add more verbage to your current job description

Eastern Washington University, (COMMA, not semicolon) Washington

I would highly recommend you pay for a resume writing service. It will cost around $100 or so, but it is worth it. After that, you can always modify the content easily.
 

Imdmn04

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Use industry keywords.

Your descriptions are too broad, specify what technologies/standards/products you have used on you job.
 

SoLiDus88

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objective is not really needed. you can state it in your cover letter.

Can you add quantifiable numbers into your experience bullet points? For example: Assisted Support Team with VOIP deployment which saved 5 man hours...
 

KillerCharlie

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Originally posted by: SoLiDus88
objective is not really needed. you can state it in your cover letter.

Can you add quantifiable numbers into your experience bullet points? For example: Assisted Support Team with VOIP deployment which saved 5 man hours...


I would definitely leave the objective there. Cover letters are extremely rare when you're starting out.
 

James Bond

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I feel like im not telling much about myself in the summary section. I've been using computers my whole life... I've been building computers since I was like 13. I have been doing networking for like 6 years, and I've used every piece of software under the sun.

How do I convey that to them?
 
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