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[LOLyourFace]

resume
thank you. feel free to comment.

[edit]
esp grammar and punctuation and stuff, I'm not good at it.

 

[LOLyourFace]

bummp

 

[Storm]

Umm... The font is way too small...
What kind of job are you looking for?

 

[LOLyourFace]

Originally posted by: Storm
Umm... The font is way too small...
What kind of job are you looking for?

any job that would get me $$. This is just my all-purpose resume for retail jobs, temp agency, etc... The font is too big? I think it's fine

 

[Kevin]

Your current job should be listed first then the rest in chronological order or vice versa. I don't remember off hand.

 

[Yossarian]

"Provided professional customer care assuring their satisfaction and various demands"

I don't know what the "various demands" part means, it's vague.

"Highly responsible position that required leading a group of 20 children"

I would reword that to the verb-first format you're using most other places. "Led a group of 20 children..." You can leave off the highly responsible bit, anyone reading that would know you there's a lot of responsiblity.

If you can put numbers on some accomplishments it makes your results more tangible and effective, i.e. "led sales staff with 400 systems sold in the 2nd quarter", something along those lines. In other words specifically how have you made money for the company.

Is it really 2 pages? Maybe it's just the formatting on my end. Your resume should be one page only.

Use the same punctuation between your employment dates, it varies.

Good luck! Remember to change that phone number before you submit it

 

[MomAndSkoorbaby]

"EDUCATION

University of Massachusetts Lowell, Lowell, MA
Major in Business Marketing, minor concentration in Graphic Design; Class of 2004 GPA 3.1

EMPLOYMENT HISTORY

AT&T BROADBAND Chelmsford, MA

Customer Service & Care Professional 6/02-9/02

· Completed 240 hours of full training for video technical knowledge and advanced customer sales
· Provided professional customer care assuring their satisfaction and various demands
· Proficient in Advanced Customer Service Representative (ACSR) developed by CSG systems"

Okay, take that and do something like this:

EDUCATION

University of Massachusetts
Lowell, Massachusetts
WHAT WAS THE DEGREE? (yes dumb question, but you need to state whether it was bachelors or what!)
Then on the side, in alignment with your other dates, list the years you attended...whether it was 10 or 4.


EMPLOYMENT HISTORY

AT&T BROADBAND
Chelmsford, Massachusetts

Customer Service & Care Professional 6/02-9/02 ( I would write June 2002-September 2002)

· Completed 240 hours of full training for video technical knowledge and advanced customer sales
· Provided professional customer care assuring their satisfaction and various demands
· Proficient in Advanced Customer Service Representative (ACSR) developed by CSG systems


Just the little things like that....it needs some work. It needs to really state clearly what you have accomplished in terms of education and employment without being too long or cumbersome. The places and dates should be lined up so at quick glance, they can see that you worked there for say 4 years and somewhere else for 10 or whatever. Ideally, it should be no longer than 2 pages. Some people say one, but two is the absolute max.

Always list most recent.

 

[LOLyourFace]

Originally posted by: PipBoy
"Provided professional customer care assuring their satisfaction and various demands"

I don't know what the "various demands" part means, it's vague.

"Highly responsible position that required leading a group of 20 children"

I would reword that to the verb-first format you're using most other places. "Led a group of 20 children..." You can leave off the highly responsible bit, anyone reading that would know you there's a lot of responsiblity.

If you can put numbers on some accomplishments it makes your results more tangible and effective, i.e. "led sales staff with 400 systems sold in the 2nd quarter", something along those lines. In other words specifically how have you made money for the company.

Is it really 2 pages? Maybe it's just the formatting on my end. Your resume should be one page only.

Use the same punctuation between your employment dates, it varies.

Good luck! Remember to change that phone number before you submit it

GREAT keep em coming!

 

[Storm]

Originally posted by: LOLyourFace

Originally posted by: Storm
Umm... The font is way too small...
What kind of job are you looking for?

any job that would get me $$. This is just my all-purpose resume for retail jobs, temp agency, etc... The font is too big? I think it's fine

Some other ppl's opinions on fonts and resumes

 

In regards to the font size, I think it's fine for Arial. If it were that font size with font style Times Roman, then it would be too small.

Here are the grammatical problems with your resume:

"Possess extensive knowledge in computer usage. Self taught experience in building computer systems and hardware/software troubleshooting, including hardware installation and optimization.
Proficient in Korean"

First off, "self taught" should have been hyphenated. It should be "self-taught". Secondly, just when you think that no one's observing what seems like little things, someone out there also known as your potential employer is observing things you do.

Your resume reveals someone who isn't sure of himself. Here's why: On your objective, you fail to use a period to end your sentence. And then on other subcategories, you use periods on some spots but don't use it on other spots. You must be consistent. There should be a period at the end of each sentence. It should be "Proficient in Korean." Your mixture of periods and no periods doesn't seem like a deliberate thing and style. It looks like it's done unintentionally.

But don't go putting periods in the IT Support Lab Assistant category. That one is fine as it is.

Your objective doesn't look right in spacing. I don't know whether you used a tab or something somewhere there, but it looks overly spaced. Keep it consistent with your other spacing in other subcategories.

Lastly, it's okay to write the following as you have it: "Responsible for proper closing, organizing inventory"[/i] However, it isn't smooth when reading it. Why not write, "Responsible for proper closing and organizing inventory"? I hope that helps.

Well, one more thing: "Major in Business Marketing, minor concentration in Graphic Design; Class of 2004 GPA 3.1"

How about a semi-colon in between the major and minor? Then a period and Class of 2004; GPA 3.1?

 

[chemos]

I disagree that it needs to be one page. As it stands though, it's just -barely- over. You could slim it down a bit if you wanted a short-n-sweet or else you could kick up the font to make it more readable and make it two well-formatted pages.

When listing employment, list your most current job first, then preceding jobs in order to the oldest one at the end.

In my opinion, I also think you should move skills down past education and employment, and elaborate on them. What kind of hardware/software? Workstations? Servers? What OS' are you familiar or have had experience with? I would also leave "self taught" out of it. It doesn't matter how you learn it, so long as you know it. As ridiculous as it is, some people seem to think learning from school is better than learning on your own.

Hope this was helpful. Good luck to ya in your ventures!

 

[Placer14]

Bullets your interests. If you're not including References, I would leave it off the resume completely. If they want references, they will ask anyway. So the statement is redundant IMO.

yea, that's good for now.

 

[Yossarian]

Originally posted by: chemos
I disagree that it needs to be one page. As it stands though, it's just -barely- over. You could slim it down a bit if you wanted a short-n-sweet or else you could kick up the font to make it more readable and make it two well-formatted pages.

It's ok if you disagree but you're still wrong Someone who to be honest has not had a real career-type job yet does not need 2 pages. Many recruiters will toss without reading resumes longer than one page for an entry-level position.

 

Yes, the consensus is that you list your current or most recent jobs first.

However, I think there are exceptions. If your current job is of the low end and far from what you are seeking but your old job gained you a lot of experience, then chronological order isn't the best move to make. You want to emphasise your job that is best suiting to what you seek at the moment. So, if I was working for HP but lost my job and then started to work for Fry's as a saleperson, I sure would have my HP experience listed first when searching for a techie job again. I could be wrong, but that's what I know. I think that's the functional resume, as opposed to the chronological resume. And from what I see in your resume, functional is your emphasis.

P.S.: Yes, try to take out that "referrals available upon request." It defeats the one page effect in your case. Either you try to resize your page setup or you just eliminate that one.

 

[chemos]

Originally posted by: PipBoy

Originally posted by: chemos
I disagree that it needs to be one page. As it stands though, it's just -barely- over. You could slim it down a bit if you wanted a short-n-sweet or else you could kick up the font to make it more readable and make it two well-formatted pages.

It's ok if you disagree but you're still wrong Someone who to be honest has not had a real career-type job yet does not need 2 pages. Many recruiters will toss without reading resumes longer than one page for an entry-level position.

I've gotten, umm, every job I've had off a two page resume. Well, with the exception of my early-on high school fast food stuff. I'd say many managers/recruiters would prefer a two page resume they can read opposed to a scrunched-up one-pager.

But feel free to say I'm wrong. You're entitled to your opinion just as I'm entitled to mine. *shrugs*

 

[hungrypete]

try to get it on one page, or move it around so the content is spread out, right now youre using only a couple lines of page2

also if you are in college you can go to your job placement dept or whatever it's called there, and they are there to help you make your resume look good and make job contacts for you

 

[kt]

Originally posted by: chemos

Originally posted by: PipBoy

Originally posted by: chemos
I disagree that it needs to be one page. As it stands though, it's just -barely- over. You could slim it down a bit if you wanted a short-n-sweet or else you could kick up the font to make it more readable and make it two well-formatted pages.

It's ok if you disagree but you're still wrong Someone who to be honest has not had a real career-type job yet does not need 2 pages. Many recruiters will toss without reading resumes longer than one page for an entry-level position.

I've gotten, umm, every job I've had off a two page resume. Well, with the exception of my early-on high school fast food stuff. I'd say many managers/recruiters would prefer a two page resume they can read opposed to a scrunched-up one-pager.

But feel free to say I'm wrong. You're entitled to your opinion just as I'm entitled to mine. *shrugs*

There's no right or wrong about having one or two pages resumes. If the person has enough experience that requires 2 pages that's fine. But if you are barely embarking on a career, two pages seem a little excessive. What does it tell me about a person if he has to use multiple sentences to describe something he could've done in one phrase? Inefficient comes to mind. There are people out there who REALLY have no choice but to have 2 pages resumes because their career experience alone takes up a page. But from the look of LOLyourFace's resume, he doesn't require it.


As for comments on the resume:
I find it kind of difficult to read because of the poor use of line spacing in the Employment History. I find it a lot easier when people use double space to separate your different employments and group each employment together using single space. That way, I don't have to hunt where it ends and where the next employment begins. You'll also reduce the amount of valuable resume real estate used on that one page. Change the date format from 6/02 to June 2002 or Jun. 2002. Eloborate on your skills section. You may also want to remove things are not relevant and add things that are relevant to the job you're applying for. Say you're applying for a tech support position, they don't really want to know you have burger flipping skills. Instead you can add something more relevant and helpful in getting you the job.