- Jul 20, 2004
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I never write poetry and I'm usually horrible at it, but I thought it'd be a nice gesture to write a poem for this girl I like for Valentine's day.
Could you guys give me some constructive criticism?
Every night while I lie in bed,
Only thoughts of you run through my head
Each waking moment I think about you.
I only wish you felt the way I do.
I can always imagine your beautiful voice,
It would be all I heard if I had the choice.
Your gleaming eyes are filled with allure
You are the best of the best, of that I'm sure
I've wanted to show you how I feel.
But with this rejection I cannot deal.
As I think of how it could be so nice,
I want to tell you, but then think twice.
I'd like to have you by my side,
All the time through changing tides.
I promise our times will be so grand,
We'll walk together hand in hand.
My only desire for you and me
Is to be more than friends, with intimacy.
It doesn't feel like my feelings and I will part,
So in this small box lies the key to my heart.
(Last line refers to a necklace that I'm giving her)
Could you guys give me some constructive criticism?
Every night while I lie in bed,
Only thoughts of you run through my head
Each waking moment I think about you.
I only wish you felt the way I do.
I can always imagine your beautiful voice,
It would be all I heard if I had the choice.
Your gleaming eyes are filled with allure
You are the best of the best, of that I'm sure
I've wanted to show you how I feel.
But with this rejection I cannot deal.
As I think of how it could be so nice,
I want to tell you, but then think twice.
I'd like to have you by my side,
All the time through changing tides.
I promise our times will be so grand,
We'll walk together hand in hand.
My only desire for you and me
Is to be more than friends, with intimacy.
It doesn't feel like my feelings and I will part,
So in this small box lies the key to my heart.
(Last line refers to a necklace that I'm giving her)